Sunday, February 10, 2008

abstract

This paper is about the lack of local amenities in Las Vegas, a highly commercialized city. I have been researching what in fact there is to do in Las Vegas, one main focus has been what is there outside of the casinos; strip or otherwise. Books have been far and between for research and the internet has good information. Resources have almost been limited to the internet, local magazines, and local weekly papers. I will be plotting out where the major master planned communities lie in relation to museums, the strip, and other places of activity that I will mention in my paper. One concern is the Vegas valley is actually three major cities/suburbs. The interaction of these communities I think ties in to a certain degree. I've started to poll people who have lived here longer than I to see what they do. One thing that seems to run throughout the people that I've interviewed and heard people talking about is that they avoid the strip like the plague and only go there when friends/family comes to visit. I have found in my research as a new comer to Las Vegas that there is more than meets they eye, but I am still coming to the conclusion that majority of amenities are within casinos. I'm hoping the outcome will be to show things to do and possibly be proposals to what this valley needs to help people to stay here (and not just because of their job).

2 comments:

kschommer said...

Hi Frances,

While reading your abstract I notice that you used a lot of uncertain words like "almost", "I will", "I think", "seems" and "I'm hoping". If you change the effect of these words/phrases and make them more of a declaration statement like, "I have found", or just remove the ones like "almost" completely from the sentence and it strenthens your abstract. Right now it reads as though you are very unsure and I don'think that this is the case because I know that this subject is a personal experience for you and something that you feel passionate about.

When you reference the types of resources that you've used I would get much more specific. It is as though they are being discredited by being so vague about them. Really dig into what your resources are saying/researching about this subject matter.

Kate

Nick Graal said...

Frances,
I am really interested in what further information will come out of your polls/interviews with people that have been in Vegas longer. Your first hand account as well as the first hand accounts of others will help strengthen your paper.